“Characters that are complex and unique who will take you on an unpredictable, cinematic, personal journey."
PAGE International Screenwriting Awards
"Non-stop ride, thrill a minute."
Bay Area DP
"Not afraid to unzip the teen angst genre to a seedier realism & twist in technology
as the new predator in town."
Acclaim Film & Television
"Distinct vision and point of view."
Screen Agent -- PAGE International
"Excellent premise...the reality of the characters makes the script real & readable."
Frank Drouzas, Coordinator Acclaim Film & Television
""Disturbing...but in a good way."
D. Foster - Routes for Youth
"For such a dark subject matter, I was delighted at how humorous and enjoyable it was."
David Hartzheim - Intramedia Arts
JUST RECENTLY Piink Dress was recognized by the BlueCat Screening Competition. We're including a portion of a judge's comments; in that, this critique highlights a number of points we were attempting to accomplish. Enjoy:
The dialogue – particularly in scene 5 where Shay and Trish are together in the latter's room – is catchy, well timed, and fresh. You have a real ear for dialogue, especially when it comes to Shay. Her turn-of-phrase is hip without being cliché and new without being overly jarring and fabricated. There's a fine line between caricature of 'youngspeak' and real, frank portrayal of youth. You've done a good job of creating a specific voice for a specific character. I particularly like the exchange on page 8 where Shay comforts an angst-ridden Trish – "weird with a beard" and "Trish la dish" are two examples of your extremely clever manipulation of language, rhyme and expression – similarly, on page 103, I very much liked Pin's mention of "Sodomy Arabia". Well done for having created fresh-sounding, original dialogue.
Bill Trueman is a likeable, relatable character despite – or perhaps because of – his very human flaws. His napkin-figure-making talents are an interesting, visual way to express what the character is going through. A good example of this is on page 86 – when it seems as if his marriage is about to fall apart, Bill creates a figure holding a gun to his head. This is a great conceit – maybe you should use it more often to show what Bill is feeling rather than explicitly telling us. There are a few scenes that work particularly well – short and pithy, moving the plot forward.
Scene 9 is well constructed – great opening juxtaposition of stodgy NPR and Internet porn. Similarly, scene 27 where Bill discovers the dildo and the cash, is great as it is a shocking turn of events and is the first time the audience is really in tune with Bill in the scene as he discovers supposed proof of his young daughter's malfeasance.
Overall, this is a great critique of modern society: overworked parents unable to truly 'connect' with their children, the dangers the Internet poses to naïve kids, the effects of sexual abuse, trouble in Suburban paradise. It is an excellent social analysis.
